Collage by CreatingPoetry

CreatingPoetry


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YOURE JOKING! THIS IS A JOKE! I was just hopping along, thinking this is a light little poem about losing a loved one, noting how cool you set everything up and then BAM you hit me with “he was the one carrying the knife” and I was like ‘nah, that’s fake.” And then I read “he had found her in the forest breathing and alive.” And I was like OMG. YOU’RE A GENIUS! And of course I should have known you’d throw in a plot twist in there, you always do and somehow they still always catch me off guard. I’ve got to say, this is my favorite yet. I just love everything about this. For constructive criticism, I’d say that maybe the first half of the poem could be a little more fast paced and a little less repetitive. I love what you wrote, it just feels too slow compared to the second half. But holy moly I’m shook. Thank you for always entering such beautiful pieces, I’m truly honored to get to read them ♥️